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How to Describe a Shocked Character

By Isobel Coughlan

how to describe a shocked character

In this post, we look at how you can demonstrate shock in the characters your writing through 10 descriptive words. Scroll down to learn how to describe a shocked character.

 

1. Startled

Definition

To be surprised or alarmed.

Examples

โ€œThe young birthday girl was startled by the clownโ€™s appearance, but she held her tears in and put on a brave face.โ€

โ€œHenryโ€™s blood pressure shot up as soon as the balloon popped. He was obviously startled and needed some fresh air to calm down.โ€

How it Adds Description

โ€œStartledโ€ shows that a character is shocked and slightly frightened by the situation. Characters who are more anxious are usually likely to be โ€œstartled,โ€ as theyโ€™re typically jumpy or nervous than more confident characters. If something does leave them โ€œstartled,โ€ they may need to leave the situation to collect their feelings and calm down.

 

2. Aghast

Definition

Someone whoโ€™s filled with surprise and horror.

Examples

โ€œEmily was left aghast after the horror film. Every time she lay in bed, she saw the killer and his creepy mask in her dreams.โ€

โ€œThe policeman started at the crime scene aghast. Nothing in his 20 years of experience had been this severe.โ€

How it Adds Description

If you want to show a characterโ€™s response to a particularly horrifying event, โ€œaghastโ€ is an apt adjective. This shows that the character is shocked in a scared and disgusted way, and they likely donโ€™t know how to comprehend the horrible scene. Characters who are left โ€œaghastโ€ arenโ€™t easily shocked; therefore, their intense reaction shows the severity of the circumstances.

 

3. Shaking

Definition

Someone or something thatโ€™s shaking back and forth.

Examples

โ€œThe young boy was left shaking after walking through the horror maze. Navigating jump scares was not his favorite pastime.โ€

โ€œDespite her nerves and shaking legs, Anna volunteered herself as a last-minute tribute to save her friends.โ€

How it Adds Description

You can use the word โ€œshakingโ€ to show a characterโ€™s physical reaction to shock. When a character is so surprised that theyโ€™re โ€œshaking,โ€ theyโ€™re likely also experiencing a flood of adrenaline. This could give them extra bravery in scary events, allowing them to step up to the challenge or save the day.

 

4. Amazed

Definition

Someone filled with surprise and incredulity.

Examples

โ€œThe news didnโ€™t leave Ben with a sinking feeling. He was simply amazed at the change of events.โ€

โ€œEveryone ran from the loud noises, except Jamie, who was amazed by the strange sounds.โ€

How it Adds Description

Not all feelings of shock are negative, and some curious characters might be left โ€œamazedโ€ by surprising situations. Characters who feel โ€œamazedโ€ are likely very inquisitive about life and want to learn more about the cause of the surprise. However, if a character is โ€œamazedโ€ when everyone else is scared, they might be fearless or interested in strange things โ€” this is more common in antagonists or villains.

 

5. Dismayed

Definition

Someone filled with alarm and apprehension.

Examples

โ€œEric was dismayed at the sight of the town. Heโ€™d worked so hard, and someone had ruined everything in seconds.โ€

โ€œAmy was left dismayed after she fumbled her public speaking. But she wasnโ€™t afraid to try again.โ€

How it Adds Description

You can use โ€œdismayedโ€ to show a character is surprised by events but also upset and apprehensive about them. This reaction is common for any character who cares about the situation, typically including heroes and protagonists. However, these good characters will always overcome negative feelings and continue helping others.

 

6. Stunned

Definition

To be extremely shocked and astounded.

Examples

โ€œThe evil mayor stumbled backward, totally stunned. He didnโ€™t expect his plan to be foiled.โ€

โ€œAlice was completely stunned when people on the street started to recognize her.โ€

How it Adds Description

โ€œStunnedโ€ shows a character who is so surprised that they donโ€™t know what to do. This is likely to occur when the surprise or shock is very extreme or on a large scale. All types of characters can feel โ€œstunned,โ€ but itโ€™s more common in characters who have very strong belief systems, as opposing events disrupt their worldview.

 

7. Breathless

Definition

To have trouble breathing normally due to excitement or fear.

Examples

โ€œThe young prince was left breathless with fear after the knights took him hostage.โ€

โ€œDespite reassurance from her teachers, Penny was breathless after seeing her failed exam results.โ€

How it Adds Description

If you want to show a shocked and overwhelmed character, use โ€œbreathless.โ€ This adjective shows that the character is so surprised theyโ€™re having trouble maintaining their basic bodily functions. This will emphasize their shock to both the other characters and your reader. Characters experiencing life-altering events will likely have this strong reaction.

 

8. Horrified

Definition

Someone so shocked theyโ€™re frightened.

Examples

โ€œThe farmer was horrified to find his barn empty.โ€

โ€œAs she walked up to her house, Emily couldnโ€™t shake the feeling that something was wrong. She was horrified when she realized that the door was unlocked.โ€

How it Adds Description

You can show a character is very scared and shocked simultaneously via โ€œhorrified.โ€ Any generally uneasy characters are more likely to feel โ€œhorrified,โ€ especially in more mundane situations. This personality is often seen in protagonists who must rise to meet the plotโ€™s challenges.

 

9. Nauseous

Definition

To feel sick and like you want to vomit.

Examples

โ€œThe little girl became nauseous instantly at the sight of the dead cat.โ€

โ€œEver since the earthquake, Jack had been nauseous. His body couldnโ€™t cope with the horrible changes.โ€

How it Adds Description

Another way to show your character is shocked is through โ€œnausea.โ€ Being โ€œnauseousโ€ implies that the characters are so shocked that they are feeling ill and may even be physically sick. This is a great way to highlight extreme shock.

 

10. Speechless

Definition

Being unable to speak due to shock.

Examples

โ€œThe pupil was speechless after the headmaster embarrassed him in front of the whole class.โ€

โ€œMary Poppins always left her clients speechless.โ€

How it Adds Description

โ€œSpeechlessโ€ shows your character is surprised to the point of wordlessness. If you have a very quick-witted or chatty character, them being rendered โ€œspeechlessโ€ would show the situation is extremely shocking for them. Whereas a generally quiet characterโ€™s โ€œspeechlessnessโ€ wouldnโ€™t be as dramatic.

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